I write and sell a few stories. If yours was crap I would have moved on and not bothered. xxx video The “D” was pure hoke. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. Right now you are trying to be clever. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was to do with the lack of detail and description of there settings. Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. i was definatly captured all the way to the end. I also agree with wordytom… a simple story line whould have worked much better.
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