Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. Don’t give up, just get better. xxx video You obviously have a budding imagination but your writing skills leave much to be desired. Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. I give this attempt a 1 out of 10.«12» 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-10-24 17:25:37I don’t know who’s talking there’s like three or four people talking and I don’t know who’s whoAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:47:00He even said Yo… Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. You obviously have a budding imagination but your writing skills leave much to be desired. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for
