Right now you are trying to be clever. xxx video good effert 9/10wordytomReport 2008-10-26 17:15:47Too gimicky. i was definatly captured all the way to the end. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! The “D” was pure hoke. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. Why not try to tell a straight story that starts at the beginning and stops at the end? 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! Right now you are trying to be clever. The “D” was pure hoke. Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was to do with the lack of detail and description of there settings.
