Sounds like both characters will enjoy and have many more hook ups. you might wanna put a bit more caution to spelling and grammer, O nd more detial tooTedReport 2010-04-22 13:27:26Yes, good story, stay in 1st and 2nd person, but be sure to write part #2. xxx you might wanna put a bit more caution to spelling and grammer, O nd more detial tooTedReport 2010-04-22 13:27:26Yes, good story, stay in 1st and 2nd person, but be sure to write part #2. It made me hard and I am sure lots of girls wet. Please don’t let her get pregnant, that ruins a good story and it’s not a secret anymore. . . . . …Anonymous readerReport 2009-10-04 18:05:08good start…i agree about the switching between the 1st & 3rd person…you should also be a little more descriptive with what they are doing to each
