Ok, you could expand some more on the ideas in there but that only adds to the potential 8/10 good effort.anonymous readerReport 2012-06-04 20:30:06Apart from typos (everyone makes mistakes,) it’s a great story. xxx 18 Ok, you could expand some more on the ideas in there but that only adds to the potential 8/10 good effort.Ghostrider939Report 2011-05-15 03:13:31Sorry, see nothing here to pique my interest. Ok, you could expand some more on the ideas in there but that only adds to the potential 8/10 good effort.Ghostrider939Report 2011-05-15 03:13:31Sorry, see nothing here to pique my interest. Illogical spacing, some shocking spelling and a story I couldn’t even follow.«1» 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-04 20:32:43Apart from typos (everyone makes mistakes,) it’s a great story. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-04 20:32:43Apart from typos (everyone makes mistakes,) it’s a great story.
