3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-04 20:32:43Apart from typos (everyone makes mistakes,) it’s a great story. Ok, you could expand some more on the ideas in there but that only adds to the potential 8/10 good effort.Ghostrider939Report 2011-05-15 03:13:31Sorry, see nothing here to pique my interest. xxx 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-04 20:32:43Apart from typos (everyone makes mistakes,) it’s a great story. Ok, you could expand some more on the ideas in there but that only adds to the potential 8/10 good effort.anonymous readerReport 2012-06-04 20:30:06Apart from typos (everyone makes mistakes,) it’s a great story. Ok, you could expand some more on the ideas in there but that only adds to the potential 8/10 good effort.Ghostrider939Report 2011-05-15 03:13:31Sorry, see nothing here to pique my interest.
