1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-07-17 12:49:02Length is disappointing, detail was lacking and what was said has been done a couple thousand times on this site already. Don’t be afraid of using words and putting detail into things, tell us every movement, every thought going through the characters head. xxx But there is still quite a bit of potential here. Don’t be afraid of using words and putting detail into things, tell us every movement, every thought going through the characters head. Don’t be afraid of using words and putting detail into things, tell us every movement, every thought going through the characters head. 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-07-17 12:49:02Length is disappointing, detail was lacking and what was said has been done a couple thousand times on this site already.
