You keep using Your instead of You’re, cars don’t have breaks unless they’re broken, they have brakes, start each sentence with a capital, use punctuation for goodness sake! 28 comments«12345»wantingnotReport 2019-11-03 23:10:58Th concept is quite good but it is presented poorly. xxx It’s not were, it’s we’re for we are, Mom peeked around the door, not peaked, the story is full of such mistakes and they make it hard to read. The storyline is opressively trite and it’s filled with minucia.Anonymous readerReport 2014-08-24 23:52:18The basic story is good, but you really need to work on your spelling and grammar. Try reading some Steven King for pace.Anonymous readerReport 2016-08-04 20:32:44I gave you a negative rating because she had a shaved pussy.
