8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 22:41:19some little details you need to work on are what his cum tasted like or what it felt like being fucked but overall i like your talent at writing this story and you are fairly young so those mistakes are alrightanonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 12:33:23longer story and better detail. xxx 18 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 22:41:19some little details you need to work on are what his cum tasted like or what it felt like being fucked but overall i like your talent at writing this story and you are fairly young so those mistakes are alrightanonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 12:33:23longer story and better detail. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-01 22:41:19some little details you need to work on are what his cum tasted like or what it felt like being fucked but overall i like your talent at writing this story
